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Friday, Sep 19, 2008

... for once in my life. As I said in my previous blog I've been writing some poetry lately, and with not much else to blog about, I decided to start posting some. This is a piece I wrote a while ago, one of my first poems.

Betrayal

Darkness, my true and only friend,
come hide me from the horrors of the night
Until your reign of silence comes to a bitter end
And I am left to face the new day's treacherous light.

In your black embrace, I hide away
Alone with the torments of my restless mind
But you cloak me with dreams, keep my demons at bay
And protect me from fear by making me blind

But now, on this night I wish I'd fled,
for in my dreams malicious shadows creep
And that dark horse thunders wildly through my head
Then, shaken and screaming, I wake from my sleep

In darkness, now, I hear them crawl
All around me, strange phantoms are fast closing in
Now I realise the truth, you are no friend at all,
to deprive me of sight, and let these things win

Not a friend, but not my enemy
You do this not out of hate, or from spite
A harsh lesson learned, but now I can see,
the cold, cruel indifference of the night

Comments and criticism would be much appeciated, but don't be too harsh, since this is some of my earliest work. Depending on what people's reaction is, I might post more of my poetry here. Also, with not much to write about, I'm considering starting a blog series, don't really have any concrete ideas yet, just snowballing things in my mind, but suggestions would be welcome. I thought about bringing back Word of the Week from its grave, but I don't think the time is right for that.
Alright, thanks for reading, I'll see you 'round.

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Great poem, nice flow and feeling to it, I enjoyed it greatly!

I'd love to read more.
Posted Sep 20, 2008 4:24 am PT
That's some good stuff!
Posted Sep 20, 2008 5:40 am PT
That was great. Post some more if you have the time.
Posted Sep 20, 2008 7:53 am PT
thats was friggin transcedental man!
Posted Sep 20, 2008 12:22 pm PT
Wow, thanks everyone, didn't think it would be that well received (yes, I am extremely self-critical). So, it looks like I'll be posting more of my poetry in future.
Posted Sep 20, 2008 5:28 pm PT
It really is that good. Seriously. I truly mean that.
Posted Sep 21, 2008 1:26 am PT
Cool, keep up the good work.
Posted Sep 21, 2008 7:23 am PT
Major that was great sorry it took me so long to read it ..I have been busy again but I loved it and I do hope you post more ..I hope you are doing good and I miss ya see ya soon I hope take care and enjoy the weekend !
Posted Oct 9, 2008 10:46 pm PT
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