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Episode 8

Credit goes to LegendofNerd

Setting: In a creepy forest (The Forest of Annoyance) with a warehouse

Eric: *steps around cautiously while the mad scientist goes into the house*

*inside the warehouse*

Igor Madman: Oh ho ho ho! What treasure we have here! Over a hundred organs plus the extra fifty from the hospital! Soon my dream house made of organs will be made! And I did this all by myself!

Kookamonka: *growls*

Madman: Okay, fine! We did it!

*outside of the house*

Eric: *peers into the window grossed out* What kind of a sick **** is this?

Madman: ! What was that?

Eric: *gets out of the window*

Madman: *grins* Looks like we just got ourselves a free donor! Kookamonka! After him! *runs out the door*

Eric: *runs in the door unnoticed*

*30 min. later*

Madman: *comes back to the door angry* Gah! If it's even one person who gets away from me, it gives me a bad day! I swear, when I see that guy again

*Eric accident slips a jar and it rolls*

Madman: ! Did you just hear that? Kookamonka! Capture him!

*Eric is breathing heavily

Kookamonka is sniffing around for a human scent and is near Eric*

*Eric steps back and knocks down a whole rack of jars*

*Jars are smashed*

Madman: O_O *stuttering in fear* What was that? No, not my...AHHH! Kookamonka watch what you're doing!

*Kookamonka spots Eric and is screaming wildly*

Eric: Dammit! *looks around for something to attack*

*grabs a jar and smacks it at Kookamonka*

*Kookamonka suffers a huge cut on face and goes beserk*

Madman: Yes! That's it! Hurt him more and it will make the organization process much faster!

*Kookamonka is more fierce and strong*

Eric: Oh crap...*softly* I mind as well show myself reveal *jumps up in front of Igor Madman*

Madman: So, decided to reveal yourself, eh? Now that's a good boy. Kookamonka, sit!

*Kookamonka returns to normal*

I don't know how you manage to find me here, but that matters not! The only thing I can assume is that you came here to sacrifice your organs for my dream hou-

Eric: I came here because you left evidence at the bakery.

Madman: What do you mean?

Eric: *smirks* You left evidence there.

Madman: *furious at looks at Kookamonka with his mad eye* Why you little...*strangles Kookamonka* You stupid monkey! How could you forget to tear and rip apart your favorite meal!?!

*Kookmonka makes gibberish screeches*

What do you mean I forgot to summon you? You dare suggest that I, Dr. Igor Madman, would forget to do such an important task?!?

*Kookamonka shakes head to say "Yes"*

Gaah! *tosses Kookamonka aside and it runs away*

Come back here you impudent ape!

*silence*

Kookamonka?

*Igor Madman goes to where Kookamonka ran off and sees it sleeping*

This is no time for napping! Get up! Get up! *nothing happens*

*At the other side*

Willy: Looks like the tranquilizer gun really worked!

Madman: You! How did you!

Kansas: It was all part of a plan, Dr. Igor Madman! By the authorities of the law, you are arrest! Oh, and by the way, you might not want to struggle. *points to Alastah*

Madman: *sweats* Well hey there, ah...*immediately pulls out a control and presses a button which traps the Dream Squad and immediately a knife tosses at Eric without him noticing*

Eric: *falls down in intense pain in chest and moans*

Madman: Gah hahaha! You didn't honestly think you would get away so easily did you?

Kansas: Nooo! Eric!

Madman: *looks back while running* Looks like I live another day! Wahahaha *bumps into...Eric?*

What the!?! *looks behind and still sees Eric on the floor, turns around and sees Eric in front of him*

How is this possible?!?

*the real Eric snaps his finger and the otherdisappears*

Eric: *grins* Hello Dr. Igor Madman! I am Magiciandude!

Dream Squad:

Madman: What?!? But no! This can't be! *reaches out for knife*

Eric: *grabs Madman's arm and twists it*

Igor Madman: GYEAHHH!!!

Eric: Don't bother. Now then, release them.

Madman: Or what?

Eric: Glad you asked. *smashes jar of organs*
Madman: *turns white and shrieks* NOOOO!!!! MY ORGANS!!! MY PRECIOUS ORGANS!!! YOU HEARTLESS BASTARD HOW COULD YOU!!!

Eric: *shoves him* Then release them or it's bye-bye organs.

Madman: >:[ *growls* Why I outta

Eric: *lifts leg* I'm sorry, what was that?

Madman: *immediately* Nothing!

Eric: Now them go.

Madman: *grumbles and presses button* Now then I should be going.

Eric: Good, then I should be smashing! *smashes jar*
Madman: Gaahhh! I give up! *lifts arms to be arrested*

Alastah: Oh, it ain't **** over yet. *cracks knuckles*

*DSS freezes Igor Madman with his power*

Madman: HELP!

*SCREEN TURNS BLACK*

*screams are heard repeatedly*

Dr. Igor Madman: *badly bruised everywhere and is handcuffed*

Kansas: Thanks Eric! We really appreciated your help! I'd give you a badge for your work, but alas, you're not cop.

Eric: And will never be.

Kansas: 'Tis a shame.

Willy: I know. You'd make a great police officer like Diddy Kong owning the Kremlings.

Eric: Nah.

Kansas: Well then, we'll be off.

*They depart*

*Shadow suddenly appears*

Shadow: Not bad for a first time.

Eric: I know, once I get the reward for having Igor Madman arrested. I shall-*remembers* Wait a minute!*

*Shadow shakes head*

Hey guys!

*Kansas turns around and Shadow is already gone*

Kansas: What is it Eric?

Eric: I didn't do this for free. I did it for the reward.

Kansas: Oh come on Eric! I thought you didn't care about money. After all, why would you need it.

Eric: Well *remembers that he cannot tell anyone about his debt and thinks of an excuse* Remember that time you told me that I should renovate my house? Well it costs $3,000,000,000 *sees Shadow out the window holding a Chaos Emerald* I mean, $2,999,999,999 to fix my house.

Kansas: Well I'm glad to see that you finally care about fixing your house Eric. Really I am, but don't you think you should use the money for something else? Like charity?

Willy: Or sending the money to DK Isle so that the Kong family can fight off the Kremlings.

*everyone looks at Willy*

Just saying...

Eric: Yeah but still. I did help you guys arrest him. So I still get the money

Kansas: Very well. *hands Eric the check* Here you go! I'm looking forward to see your new house! See you old pal!

Eric: See ya!

*They leave the warehouse and put Madman in the police car while he is heard shooting "I am innocent I tell you!"

*Shadow appears Eric and kicks him in the groin*

Shadow: Cheap bastard.

Eric: *in pain* But you said I couldn't say anything our deal. You didn't say I couldn't lie.

Shadow: I know, that's what makes you a cheap bastard.

Eric: *hands Shadow the check*

*Shadow slaps it back*

Shadow: I don't want that sorry excuse for a check. I'm only accepting $2 million. No more, no less. Give the money on the due date. *disappears*

Eric: *sigh* Looks like this is only just the beginning of my career.

Part 6

*At the same bakery store from before, someone who witnessed the scene, comes out of the shadows of the alley and sees another man running down the alley*

Brian: *rubs chin* That must be Dr. Igor Madman. But who was that ghosts? *looks around* And who would've thought that my high school buddy, Kansas, would be part of a police force? *secretly follows suit after Dr. Igor Madman*

*Meanwhile at the hospital*

Kansas: Alastah, how are you doing?

Alastah: *is bandaged EVERYWHERE so he can hardly be understood*

*is trying to say "I'll get the son of a ****** ghost*

Kansas: I know it's hard, but you have to recover hard. Darkspine, how is Willy doing?

Darkspine: He's doing a lot better, it was fortunate he already had a therapist beforehand.

Kansas: Good, now then, we need to formulate a plan to-

*screams can be heard from downstairs*

What the? Dream Squad! *Alastah is mumbling and Willy is sitting on a wheel chair with a straight jacket wrapped around him* Er, right, Darkspine! Form up!

*They both run downstairs and see bodies on the floor*

O_O

It must be the work of that ghost we fought earlier!

*WRONG*

*They see a man with a bloody lab coat*

Igor Madman: Alright! This is a stickup! *holds organ donors hostage* Hand me your intestines!

*Frightened people go for their own organs*

Kansas: Halt! In the name of the law! I shall have you arrested for your murderous schemes! And you WON'T going away this time! Now to get my... my... *looks around for his Bag of Goodies*

*gets pockets*

Oh no! Where is it?

Igor Madman: *evil grins* Looking for something?

Kansas: MY BAG OF GOODIES!

Igor Madman: *is seen holding it as well as Darkspine's wooden sword* You mean this piece of hunk? Well, I could throw in the furnace and-

Kansas: NO!

Igor Madman: Or, in exchange to saving the lives of these miserable fools, you can give me YOUR organs.

Kansas: *is sweating over the decision*

Darkspine: *starts getting teary eye* Kansas! NO! Don't do it!

Kansas: *smiles and pats Darkspine on the pat* I've appreciated your support, but saving even one life means more to me than my life. That's the role of a lieutenant.

Darkspine: *tears start flowing from eyes* But Kansas, you were like a like-

Kansas: Say no more. Alright Igor Madman, I'm ready for it.

Igor Madman: Ha! A rather unsurprising decision of you. Now then, over the wall will ya?

Kansas: *complies against his wills and prepares for it*

Igor Madman: *is prepared to strike down Kansas*

Darkspine: *shields eyes*

Igor Madman: *arm thrust at Kansas*

SUDDENLY!

*

*Surprise ambush from Alastah*

Alastah: NOT ON MY WATCH!

Kansas: Alastah! Don't strain yourself!

Igor Madman: Truly a shame you would risk your life in vain!

KOOKAMONKA!

Dream Squad: ?

*ambushes Alastah*

Alastah: ****!

Kansas: Alastah! NOOOO!

Igor Madman: Anyone else care to try?

Alastah: *very weak* Damn monkey...

Igor Madman: I'd stay and chat, I have other things to organize around town. See ya! Come Kookamonka!

*Outside of the hospital*

Brian: Damn! I'm too late. *pursuits on Dr. Igor Madman*