hey guys! how has everyone been?
uhm yeah so anyways, i need help from evryone, its not like im in trouble or anything-- its more like an opinion.
so for english we wrote three beginnings for creative writing. not being up myself or anything, i think im an okay writer. what i need you guys to do for me, is to pick which one you like the best. im juts gonna name them one, two and three so just put a number in the comments and that would be greatly appreciated ![]()
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ONE!
The room. I sit in its corner. It's dark. Clammy. Unrealistic. Fatal.
'Sweetie?' The robotic voice, it haunts me. 'Are you alright?'
It's a maze, seeking into the unknown with the ultimate goal of finding accomplishment. But they're everywhere. I can feel them. A seventh sense.
'It's time.' The chilling voice continues.
I hide. Desperately seeking for a means of escape. Fearing for my life. Panicking, I pivot my head. The art of reconaissance. Seeking the window. It's nowhere to be found.
I can feel it. Constricting. My air, ceasing. It's. Harder. Now.
My hands. Groping for everything. Anything. I'm struggling. There's nothing there.
My eyes. It's pitchblack. There's no window. No light. Nostalgia. There's nothing around me. I don't know where i am.
I'm alone. In its corner. I'm on my own.
I'm terrified
TWO!
I sit by the window everyday. There's not a lot of intriguing picturesque landscape. Although there is a barren patch of decomposed grass; A bunch of tablets sticking out of the ground; almost like soldiers in formation; A wire fence which segregates me from society.
Everyday I sit there thinking. What would it be like to be on the other side of this piece of glass? Would my life be any different if I was? Would i be the same?
THREE!
People see her in the window everyday. Not behind the window. Not in front of the window. Not even next to the window. She sits and stares, in the window. They always stare back at her. With intent to look subtle.
Unfortunately for them, she knows.
Everyday, as they pass, they all wonder why she sits there. She's not behind the window. Nor in front of the window. Not even next to the window. She's in the window.
thanks guys, this would really help me
love.
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Huge Hugs!
It is a tough choice between 1 and 3 for me
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jordinajamaica
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