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Sunday, Oct 7, 2007

The sirens are wailing.
The sirens are wailing.
The sirens are wailing.
The sirens are wailing.
The sirens are gone.

The skies darken. A gargantuan mass looms not far. A mass of twisted metal, blackened and scarred by erosion of blade and bone. Deep bellows drown the screams and shattering glass. Heaving structures bow at its arrival. Yellow ash.

Then, descending from the craft gliding as a dove does land, a heavily armored figure sets foot on the cobble paved road. It faces the direct end of the road and gazes at the surroundings without turning its head, swirling mist forming around the gold plates engraved so dear with fine long strokes indicating its history. Like a hero cast in stone.

'Burn it,' a deep tone sounds off the cast metal.

Cylindrical pylons at the craft's sides rotate slowly as the shifting gears moan their work, with the occasional one screaming from the torture of both weight and heat – the leaping flames boast the temperature of suns and threaten with death who dares challenge them. Ravenous for more fuel and about to engulf the place, but they were stopped.

'Someone is here.'

Immediately a figure emerges from the haze, landing on knee and foot as the earth beneath splits from the pressure. It rises, revealing its slender silhouette.

'Leave. You have no business here.'

It reveals a glistening line of silver, half tucked in a sheath hidden by its cloak.

'You know It no longer exists. You bond yourself to nothing.'

'Leave. Now.'

'You know It was toppled and taken down, never to rise again.'

'It is none of your concern. If you want to keep that chest of gold, you had better return to where you come from.'

'You tempt Artemis' judgment?'

In an instant the silver now glistens against the gold, the pure against the royal.

'No one courts Neveron's Guard.'

Black wisps leak through gaps in the armor. A stroke lightens and emits a pulse of light.

The craft disappears, as does the figure.

The street is as it was before.




Review

For those who are are wondering what this has to do with the 'something I have been hoping to find out' for just about the entire week, it really helps if you analyse somewhat and don't simply read the passage as it is

But if you really can't bring yourself to it - there's a spoiler.




SPOILER




Q: First thing, the sirens. Why is the same line repeated multiple times?
A: If you have heard those war sirens before, you shoul know they usually wail in high and low pitches alternately (or at least they do over here). But still the sound is continuous. The main reason why it's repeated is to signify that people have had multiple warnings to evacuate before the craft came.

Q: What on earth is that strange craft? It makes no sense having a giant and damaged piece of metal floating?
A: In terms of the story, it's a warship - I think most of us got that. But look a level beyond - the scars signify the casualties wars have caused and the razed territories, while the fact that it is still up and flying allures to how wars do not stop despite the heavy losses sustained.

Q: The figure coming down from the craft - you called 'it' an 'it' but not a him or her? What's with the fancy set of armor? A: I'm sure you know they often say war takes away conscience and the humanity in people. Same thing applies here. The armor basically is part of a theme - it shows that this character is of esteemed background. 'A hero cast in stone' - the 'armor' weighs the figure down... again look one level further - the antics and customs of royalty and the like are restrictive. It can also be interpreted as to show the lack of emotion in the character.

Q: Okay I get those. But how do those pylons house such flames? You said the temperature of the SUN, you know.
A: Technology. Notice the difference between the high-tech craft and the not-so-modern armor? Compare that to the real world - military research tends to be focussed much more on (albeit usually in secrecy) and during war you notice a stark contrast between the technology of war machinery and the technology present in civilians' lives. The temperatures and flames reflect the strong desire to conquer more.

Q: The other character looks like a loser. A simple cloak and a silver sword? Hahahahaha!
A: That's not a question. > > Basically represents the humble. Gold is favored compared to silver and people flaunt their assets - like in the passage the first character boasts its golden armor. It also emerges from the haze and has a 'slender silhouette' - meaning it usually isn't noticed at all. Think about that in real life. Q: What are they talking about? I don't understand?
A: That will be revealed in another episode

Q: Huh? What happened in the end?
A: The first character is not of the flesh - the black wisps can be thought of as its blood. Wisps aren't corporeal - compare that to how people who boast power tend to be unable to backup their arrogance. There are 'gaps in the armor' - gaps in what people say? And it dies - killed by the other character. Just in case you haven't realised.

Q: What about the pulse of light?
A: With respect to the story, it is basically a distress signal. Notice that nothing was mentioned about the craft retrieving the body or helping the character? In real life, typically two things can happen to those wielding power when they pass away. One, they leave behind a legacy and are mourned. Two, people do not care at all. The dead figure apparently did not have the support of its kind when it was attacked... and killed.

Q: How come things return to normal?
A: What is 'normal'? In the context of the passage, you can say that fights and deaths are common in the event of war - although most of the time no one notices unless it's a huge scale battle or some important people are involved. Again, the same thing applies to this short prose. It suggests that things are always happening around us, but we fail to notice them. And even if we do notice them, we may end up completely forgetting.




END OF SPOILER






Just curious, should I write more of this?

Comments

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Are you writing this? If so...good work.
Posted Oct 7, 2007 8:58 am PT
@LJSexay Yup And thanks ^ ^
Posted Oct 7, 2007 8:58 am PT
This explains your MSN username -_-
Posted Oct 7, 2007 9:19 am PT
Very engaging. :O
Posted Oct 7, 2007 9:42 am PT
Ever thought about posting this on DeviantART... most of the people over there would worship you for this and maybe send you money.. ^__^







*invisible text*
Posted Oct 7, 2007 10:04 am PT
@jake Yup > > Read between the lines

@fishdalf Thanks Thought I should try something new
Posted Oct 7, 2007 10:05 am PT
@axie Nope... I thought DeviantART is only for images? You sure are flattering me
Posted Oct 7, 2007 10:08 am PT
Very good. I was using my imagination to help me understand. It's just something I do whenever I read something like that.
Posted Oct 7, 2007 10:27 am PT
Except for the craft part that reminds me of the Silent Hill movie.

Good work though.
Posted Oct 7, 2007 12:20 pm PT
Pfft....thats all you were hiding
Posted Oct 7, 2007 12:28 pm PT
That's some good stuff right there...Conjured up some great imagery...
Posted Oct 7, 2007 12:41 pm PT
Very good stuff.
Posted Oct 7, 2007 2:38 pm PT
@Steph Thanks I think I'll be adding a spoiler basically reviewing some of the underlying things in that short passage

@Zoid Eh? I don't remember any characters with armor/cloaks in Silent Hill... Hm... but I think I get what you mean... how the street returns to its normal state, the sirens...

@Cougar Apparently you don't see it

@megagene Haha... it was easier to write as I could envision them in my head... makes it easier to describe

@fkholmes Thanks
Posted Oct 7, 2007 4:58 pm PT
This story wouldn't happen to have anything to do with the figure in your avatar and sig would it?

Anyway, pretty nice stuff. It makes me want to read more.
Posted Oct 7, 2007 5:07 pm PT
That is actually really good, can I read more?
Posted Oct 7, 2007 5:36 pm PT
@Bunny Nope, it's just a coincidence that both have characters clad in armor Thanks ^ ^ I'll probably put up another one in 3-5 days

@zsc Sure thing
Posted Oct 7, 2007 5:40 pm PT
Yes, you should write more.

I first thought that the creature in gold died but then I hesitated since the ship left him, without engaging the "enemy" or helping him out. Glad I got that straightened out.

So are the creatures emotionally cold... or was there a reason to why they left the one in gold like that... or perhaps that's a secret part of the story so far?
Posted Oct 7, 2007 5:58 pm PT
@Bunny Sorry to make you come back again

I'm glad that the spoiler helped clarify some things There are two main reasons - 1) although the dead captain was their superior, they were not exactly content to be under its command. In other words, they were happy that it died. 2) The figure in the cloak must be extremely powerful and they do not want to risk their lives in a direct confrontation?
Posted Oct 7, 2007 6:06 pm PT
I forced myself to read... but the TV veiled my attention in a metaphorical cloak of conflicting interest......... should I write something?
Posted Oct 7, 2007 8:11 pm PT
@king Of course you should
Posted Oct 7, 2007 8:55 pm PT
I'll try... I don't know when I'll be finished... tomorrow... next week... next month... next year (Maybe not)......... I think... next week... possibly...
Then... I will continue the attack of the multiple dots......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Posted Oct 7, 2007 10:20 pm PT
That's an awesome read! I thought the big metal warcraft was from something like Metal Gear Solid ( I had to read the spoilers ). Yeah I think you should wright more, please!
Posted Oct 7, 2007 10:49 pm PT
Damn i had no idea it was so deep, so much stuff was lost on me.
Posted Oct 7, 2007 11:32 pm PT
@king Take your time don't force yourself

@craig *is all the more !!! that he hasn't played any of the past MGS games* But thanks for the feedback

@fishdalf Don't worry... I don't think most people will read that deep into it especially when they didn't know about it in the first place
Posted Oct 7, 2007 11:46 pm PT
I think you are really good at such stuffs, although I am not a fan, nor can I truely comprehend the meaning behind. I see a mix of literature and sci-fi, and thats what makes it interesting.
Posted Oct 8, 2007 2:06 am PT
I'm writing something now... ready tomorrow...
Posted Oct 8, 2007 2:09 am PT
@Light Thanks for reading although you're not really into such things I appreciate your honesty

@king Good good... I'll check it for sure
Posted Oct 8, 2007 4:35 am PT
I read the edit/extra things, I'm impressed. But I have to be honest, I'm not that into reading, but have always wanted to but in comparison to what I have read may it be little this is good and interesting. I think you should write more, even if no one likes it you should you have a good ability. I will always be willing to read what you write, and tell you how to improve and give you praises where they are due.

That is a compliment, but don't let it get to you too much You have a bit of place for improvement, but you probably will get that as you go on. BTW I'd like to say something, it's nice to see you are happy and more relaxed again, in comparison to before.
Posted Oct 8, 2007 10:48 am PT
Before I comment on the text itself, I guess that this is an ongoing tale that you've written yourself?

And would it have helped to have read the previous episodes? PS - I've never been much of a reader to be honest.
Posted Oct 8, 2007 2:26 pm PT
Hmm... I have no clue what's going on, and I have a mild headache right now so I have no inclination to find out, but it's definitely quite the interesting yarn you've got going here. Keep going with it... it's worlds beyond most fiction I've seen from people on GS.
Posted Oct 8, 2007 3:14 pm PT
I am done with my writing... for now at least...
Posted Oct 8, 2007 4:31 pm PT
@zsc Well personally I like varying things... if you notice... I make an effort to put in all sorts of.. unconventional things into my blog. Say, instead of the usual updates like "I got some game"... "I got XXX posts" or "I did meh in school" and stuff... I try to come up with something I think people will actually be interested in reading.

After all - if you have a lot of blogs to comment in - I think it gets boring if you see the same type of blog again and again... So unless I feel that the response is sufficiently positive, I move on with something new.

Thanks again for the feedback

@Dan The title is another misnomer... thought it sounded pretty boring if I say 'Episode I'... so I thought I'd try entering some random number Yup, it is as you say, some fictional stuff I've (type)written myself...

@Funky Hope you get well soon and thanks for the compliment ^ ^

@king Alright I'l check it out
Posted Oct 8, 2007 4:49 pm PT


/slaps forehead

Pretty good, nonetheless. Even if I've got no idea what's going on. >_>
Posted Oct 9, 2007 7:25 am PT
@Dan It's kind of interesting saying ti's good when you say you have no idea what's going on at the same time
Posted Oct 9, 2007 8:26 am PT
nice job leech, well written =)
Posted Oct 9, 2007 1:14 pm PT
@dante Thanks dude
Posted Oct 9, 2007 4:49 pm PT
Think of a day and I'll have something else written by then.
Posted Oct 9, 2007 9:59 pm PT
Well you know what I mean, it's fairly intriguing.

And I'm not particuarly good at text analysis, I always take them at face value. So there...>_>
Posted Oct 10, 2007 6:33 am PT
@king What do you mean by that

@Dan Well, it's good not to read too deep into things especially in real life
Posted Oct 10, 2007 6:42 am PT
Choose a day: today, tomorrow, sometime next week. I'll have something else written by then.
Posted Oct 10, 2007 2:46 pm PT
@king Sometime next week
Posted Oct 11, 2007 4:35 pm PT
Sunday? ...I'll have something by sunday.
Posted Oct 11, 2007 5:14 pm PT
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