Chapter Two: For Real: Things get serious! Part one
''Relax, Nariku. Nothing's going to happen to you,'' the mayor said as though Nariku killing someone is an easy task.
''If nothing's going to happen to me, then why did you call me here, and not someone else?'' Nariku retorted.
''That's because you have been gifted by the gods by a special power, that could no doubt help our country a lot.''
''I honestly doubt that what you're talking is true.''
''Well I guess that you won't be convinced. What reward do you want?'' asked the mayor.
Nariku thought and thought about what he could buy with the money. He thought of all the cool gadgets he could get. Then he thought about how his mom was miserable with their living conditions. After thinking, he made his decision.
''I want a big house.'' Nariku said.
''Really? That's all you want? Ok, I'll make it happen. Now let's talk about the points about the mission.'' First of all, I want it a clean kill. I don't want him to survive. Second, there is a secret about him, I'm sorry to say but he I-''
''He, he, he. Who the hell is he?'' interrupted Nariku.
''He is the most famous serial killer in the country. You know how suddenly had to train for fighting? He's the reason why. He's killed too many people. He must be stopped, and only you can do it. Now please go home, and come back at this time tomorrow for your training.'' As the mayor finished his talk, and Nariku left, the mayor was thinking,' you can learn the secret about Maji later. You don't want to hear it, Nariku.''
The day passed, and then came the time for Nariku to go to the mayor's office....
''I'm going to the mayor's office mom!'' shouted Nariku.
''Ok, dear. Be careful!'' she said.
Nariku bolted past the park, heading to the mayor's house. He opened the door without knocking, and heard voices.
''Do you honestly think that Nariku will find out about Maji's secret?'
"Maybe, but it's best if he doesn't. It could kill him.'' Said a voice that sounded like the mayor. ''Would you like it if your previous best friend turned out to be a serial killer? No, I don't think so. So don't tell Nariku, or anyone for that matter.''
''Got it mayor.''
Nariku quickly left outside and pondered about what he heard.
''So Maji is Shikya. I wondered where he had gone. But do I have the strength to beat him?''
It Was true: Shikya was better then Nariku in almost everything except for math. And math can't save someone. Nariku thought and thought. Then he knocked on the door.
''Oh, hello, Nariku!'' said the mayor. ''Yes you came at the perfect time for the training. Here is David. He'll be your instructor.''
''Hello Nariku,'' said David kindly.
Nariku smiled back. David seemed like a good person.
''Well, if you're ready, please follow me,'' he said.
They walked to an area that Nariku had never been to.
''This is called the death circle. Many people have met their deaths here training. Only a few people are allowed to train here. It is an honor for you, indeed.''
''A training ground where people die? Doesn't sound like an ''honor'' to me,'' thought Nariku, but he kept his moth shut.
''Ok, now try to do that tornado move yesterday.'' Said David.
''Ok,'' Nariku replied.
He tried and tried, until he finally felt frustration and did it. The move incarnated every tree near Nariku, and burnt the metal nearby also.
''How was that?'' Nariku gasped.
''That? I believe that you van do more then that. THAT should be about a fraction of how powerful it should be.'' Said David grimly.
End of part one! Plz comment!
Next time: Nariku continues training. Then one night, he gets jumped by a pair of Maji's goons........
Comments
Example (from beginning of this): ''Well I guess that you won't be convinced. What reward do you want?'' asked the mayor, stroking underneath his chin while he rested his left arm on the table.
You see what I mean? Readers need description when they're reading your book. Also, you need to describe the environment often. If they walk into another room, you have to fully write out what you see in your head, otherwise the reader is just going to vision them in a blank white room.
I like getting critism on my writing, I dont' know if you do. But you can always get better, keep at it!
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