She left me at the dance-The poem

I have been working on my poem lately, and I thought I'd post one of the poems I have been working on lately. It's based on a true life story(Ah, don't writers always write about their lives?). Well, this poem is about a girl(Yup, about 70% of my poetry is about a girl). Anyway, I'm still working on it and editing it. Here is it

She left me...
at the dance
Long
wavy
hair
swaying as
she moved
with such grace
And those small eyes,
appeared to me
as she danced
to the beat
of popular sound

Walked up
said "Hello"
filled with emotions
(Unspoken tensions
unknown to her,
but hands shaking)
as my attraction
went on

Then....Then...
The doorbell rang
This strange figure,
(He knew
my intent,
then walked away)
yelling loudly,
"Rebecca!
"Rebecca!"
Oh! It was her!.
Taken from my space,
into the night
as the
dance closed
with a tear
from my lid.