I know what you mean. I am a stickler though for anti-drawing on my books and notebooks kind of guy and paper-shredding too

It was always tough to explain to teachers why there were penis all over my school work...

lol that really is random

I like what its about you can tell you have strong feelings about this.
I would say you should work on wording in general. Its too normal sounding and straight to the point. If its a lil confusing i think you leave more room for others to relate.
now that you have a start play with it.
add remove stuff let your view take you on a trip.

and remember I have no idea more then you do about this stuff.
and if its sounds like i hate it i don't
pointing out what i "think" could be better
instead of telling you its all great has much more value

lol let me know if you do more I think ima work on writing more myself id like your honest input

@Fetus5: No it is cool man. I do not mind criticism. I have not written more recently but if you look through my blogs, I posted some other lyrics a few blogs back.

Nice way to express yourself, try talking tio your friend maybe show him/her the poem.

@Mercenary848: I have tried but he takes nothing seriously and cares for no one except himself and his girlfriend. He doesn't keep things secretive and tells everyone everything I tell him. Next time he says something about me and my girlfriend that is rude, I am going all out on him though. I have sat aside too long, he has made fun of my girlfriend and me all the time. I sat aside to not start drama because he is going out with my girlfriend's best friend. So I was trying to avoid drama. My girlfriend has been getting upset about it more recently and she rather me say something now then try to avoid the drama.